I have attached your draft with some corrections. So far, you have covered the section of the assignment which introduces your organization and discusses its size/scope of operations etc.
Now you need to begin discussing Knowledge Management within your organization. You need a section which describes HOW your organization :
1. Acquires knowledge (eg buying software packages or training resources, sending employees on training programmes)
2. Retains knowledge (how does your organization keep its knowledge? This could be through documents/files, in people's heads, through processes or procedures, in the physical environment etc.
3. Shares knowledge (how does knowledge get shared within your organization? How do people find out what they need to know?)
Then you need to write a section summarizing the STRENGTHS and WEAKNESSES of knowledge management in your organization.
Lastly, you need to write a series of recommendations to improve knowledge management within your organization. Some of these recommendations will probably be based on the weaknesses you discussed in the previous section - how can you 'fix' these?